> Is this alright how it's written?

Is this alright how it's written?

Posted at: 2014-06-09 
He brings his attention onto Parker as he gazes down at him with the deepest sympathy one could ever give. "How are you holding up, kiddo?" His voice barely holds back the emotion his eyes already show. He kneels down in front of him and speaks in a soft spoken tone; too low for anyone else to hear. anything I should change or alter? or fine how it is?